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Chapter Two

Beatrice looked up. She was bright shines of sun hitting her forehead. She covered herself by looking back down. She looked over to her friend, Adam, standing there in pure shock. Beatrice was confused. Her eyes stood from her skull. The grass supporting her feet felt rough. She fainted. She heard Adam yell for help. "Help!" That was the last thing she heard.

She woke up in a doctors office. Being examined by this strange man, she got up confused. "What happened?" She asked the blond man. He had blond hair, brown eyes, and he looked like he was in his early Thirty's. He smiled back. "Well, you fainted" he said. He watched the pale face of Beatrice turned into a bright gleam. "Wheres my friend?" She asked. She was still looking around. She saw doctor supplies surronding the area. She saw her mother come in the room. Her mother had a stern worried look in her eye. Beatrice was aware of this. "Can I go now?" Beatrice asked. "Of course" he made a strange laugh. This made Beatrice very uncomfortable. Her mother sighed. "You better call in a sick day" her mother said, helping her up frpm the hospital bed. "Did he say he knew what happened to me?" Beatrice whispered over to Mrs. Goldstrings. "He said he would send me a file." She whispered back. The duo rushed out of the hospital. She sighed as she went on the car. The heat of Florida made her relieved. The hospital room gave her goosebumps, and because of more than just being cold. "When can I go back to school?" She asked. "He said you would be able to go back tomorrow." Mrs. Goldstrings turned the wheel around making the whole car shack. "What was that?!" Beatrice held on to her seatbelt tighter than ever. "Sorry" her mother apologized.

Once they got home safely, Beatrice ran to the house. She unlocked the house door and ran to her room. She looked around, thanking that she wasn't back at the hospital. Mrs. Goldstrings popped her shoes off and went on the couch. Beatrice thought about her father. When he would come back home from work. She went on her notebook and just started to write in her diary.

Dear diary,

Today was crazy. I fainted, or at least thats what the doctor said. That doctor was scary. I dont know why I passed out. That usually never happens. Well, hopefully I dont have to go there again.

See you later,

Bea

 

Hi! Here's just another chapter if you like the first one. These chapters are really short so sorry. Sorry if there is any grammar errors. Its really hard to type on a phone. I suggest you read the first chapter of this to actually get the character. Like I said, sorry forthe chapters being short. I'll be sire to make longer chapters in the future. That's all I wanted to say other than I hope you want to read more!

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Great! I like the reactions the characters made. Personally, I prefer more realistic and reasonable reactions that fit the character. I helps the reader picture the situation without having it seem to forced.
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Thx I'm writing a new chapter!

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