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Chapter 10

They woke up in a cold room, their eyes shacking, losing vision slowly. Beatrice bobbed her head, getting up carefully, looking at John's sleepy eyes. "C'mon, wake up!" Beatrice yelled.

Beatrice heard someone in the dark room, or something, making her scared. She tugged on John once more, then he finally woke up.

"What do you want?" he asked, loudly. "Shh!" Beatrice silently yelled.

"Sorry" he whispered, looking at two dusty beds in the small room. "Lets get out of here." he said, as Beatrice flung her arms on the doorknob, slowly turning it.

"Wait." John said, holding Beatrice's hand, making her slightly blush. "What do you want!?" she whispered/yelled at him.

"What if she's...out there?" he asked, as Beatrice sighed. "She's most likely in here than out there," Beatrice said, making John a tiny bit scared.

"Your right, lets go!" he opened the door, making a loud creaking sound. They both looked at each other, making John open the door nearly stopping.

Finally, the two were out of the room. Now, they had to slowly walk down the wooden stairs, making it past the old lady.

"Ladies first" John said, annoying Beatrice. "Fine" she said, slowly walking down.

By this time, Beatrice saw the old lady sleeping on the couch, as Beatrice slowly creeped down the steps.

"Now your turn," Beatrice said. "Fine."

He walked down, carefully. Luckily, the two made it down that stairs and out the bog, wooden door, to appear the big, starry night sky.
by 🌙 Enchanter (419k points)
Please answer to my stories so I can make more often. Thanks for reading BTW:-)

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by 🌙 Enchanter (453k points) [mod]
 
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Liked reading this! Keep it up.
by 🌙 Enchanter (419k points)
Thanks a bunch!
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by 🔥 Spellbinder (139k points)

Good story. emoticon-00100-smile

by 🌙 Enchanter (419k points)
Thanks a lot!!
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by 💫 Luminary (171k points)
For a bit of a grammar check, when ending a quote in a statment (no question or exclamation) put a comma inside of the quote instead of a period or just a space. It looks better and shows that you think of it as a real book.
by 🌙 Enchanter (419k points)
Thank you. I was lazy at the time lol:-D
by 💫 Luminary (171k points)
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Lol
by 🌙 Enchanter (419k points)
Yep(;

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